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Post by Nekoaa on Mar 4, 2011 23:59:02 GMT -5
Soooo we just solved the mystery. xD The place is only creepy to people playing the game because they're younger and hear the music as being wayyy more creepy. Now, if we could only find out why they decided building a radio tower over a graveyard was a good idea. EDIT: I moved this to Creative Writing in case anybody wants to try their hand. Plus, this is pretty darn creative writing
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Post by Jerez on Mar 7, 2011 0:16:28 GMT -5
I inserted the cartridge...Pearl was my favourite... I chose new game, entered my name "Jerez" and male. It started out like any other...I went to Rowin's lab...I knew I wanted chimchar. I went to it's pokeball...I was surprised to see buneary in it...and in the others. I chose one...kind of creeped out...I went into the grass to enter my first battle...it was a bunneary...but it was coloured like shadow lugia... Freaky. I finished the battle easy...the world was pink...Bright deathly pink. Horrific. All the trainers were zombies...their pokemon were either a buneary with a hockey mask and chainsaw or a buneary with a fedora, striped shirt and claws... I turned the DS off and ran...
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Post by Jack on Mar 7, 2011 12:36:55 GMT -5
You get scared to easily Jerez... In that story, you were like.
OH MY GOD!!!! BUNERY IS WHERE CHIMCHAR SHOULD BE! TOO SCARY!! >.<
Why would that part creep you out? I would just be irritated that i didn't get my chimchar
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Post by Fusion on Mar 7, 2011 13:33:26 GMT -5
i kinda agree with jack, but still, not bad for a first CreepyPasta Might i suggest that, for any future pastas, i would say to stretch out the time before any crazy **** goes down. maybe say that u were confused about slight changes, or that u didnt know what the game would be like, or something to that extent.... (crap, now i have to write some of this, so i can own at it too xD)
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Post by Jack on Mar 7, 2011 15:52:23 GMT -5
Oh yea? Well i wote one too!
Pokemon Dead sapphire
You’ve heard tales of the Dead Sapphire version, we all have. Tales of how the game would become covered in an eyrie black Mist, and being separated from your beloved Pokémon, Never to be seen again. But discovering it, that’s not the hard part, it’s forgetting...
After A while of spriting, I decided to stop my work and take a look at the new Hoenn sprites. It made me remember playing my sapphire version, for hours on end, with my unbeatable level 100 Kyogre, who could beat the entire elite four without taking a single hit. Scanning my memory for its moves, I would think they were Surf, Ice Beam, Shock Wave and Earthquake. I Decided to try and find my old sapphire version, But with no luck, I decided to order one off the internet. When it got to my house, I opened up the box, and grabbed my old Gameboy. Even before putting it into the old system, I got this strange, ominous feeling. Shrugging it off, I inserted it onto the console, and started a new game.
After a fair amount of time (I think it was about the 4th gym) I had a pretty decent team. I was about to go into the gym, when suddenly the screen blacked out. Then, it came back up, I was in the centre of town, but it didn’t look like it did before, Not only was there a black mist covering the city, but the buildings were destroyed and on fire...
After moving around I seemed to see slightly that my character was transparent, and moved around like a ghost.
I checked my trainer card, and my sprite was a ghostlike version of the original character. I then checked my Pokémon, But there was only 5 unknowns. They spelt out the word “Death”. I inspected the town for awhile, and then, the screen blacked out. I heard the cry of what sounded like a Giratina. The screen lit back up, and I was in some kind of tower. Scattered around on the floor where the bodies of my beloved Pokémon , At the back of the room was a Giratina. A went to it and pressed a, But it just launched me back, I was unable to move, And then, the beast approached me. The screen went black, Then Splatters of red appeared, Then the screen went completely white.
I appeared to be In some sort of hospital. The nurse started talking about how I had collapsed in the street and had a mind-shattering nightmare.
Before I had a mental breakdown, I shut of the power, took out the cartridge, Stomped it to pieces, And locked it on a box and put it in the loft...
You’ve heard tales of the dead Sapphire version, we all have. Tales of how the game would become covered in an eyrie black Mist, and being separated from your beloved Pokémon, Never to be seen again. But discovering it, that’s not the hard part, it’s forgetting...
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Post by Fusion on Mar 7, 2011 17:54:26 GMT -5
....wow, jack good job i love the opening/ending repetition, works perfectly. and the final sentence is win-fully creepy... What about if the red dots on the screen were actually on the screen...? Oh, and the gap between the nurse speaking to u and u smashing it seems a bit short, like u could add something in there....what if some how she seemed to respond to ur real life actions? like, she tells u "dont u dare switch me off", or something like that.... anyway, well done ;D I'll be honest, i wasnt expecting much, but that seems like a "pro" pasta xD *highfives* try and add it to "fyeahcreepypasta" or something like that....
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